Thread:Joanne Maniago/@comment-29570797-20160821000649/@comment-29570797-20161003022919

I see, that's why for the first half of the story I wanted to let the readers know what was what, so I'm going to use passive. But I am also am going to use active in the modern time portion of the story, in it's needed. Btw, I took out that first paragraph and downsized some words that were not needed. In other words, work is in progress already, and to be honest, I love how the story now starts with Elliot, which I must thank you for the suggestion.