Thread:Joanne Maniago/@comment-29570797-20160821000649/@comment-29570797-20160905030934

RoseyLaly28 wrote: the story is great but I think you need to add more informations about how Chieko knew Hiroshi was in Seoul. But don't worry, your story is great but as what Koi said, you need to improve it more. So in other words, this section is off to a good start?