Thread:Joanne Maniago/@comment-29570797-20160821000649/@comment-177.95.5.232-20160929020826

Koishi-Komeiji wrote: The writing is sloppy. Very sloppy. It's not a nice read.

And the focus of the story is Michelle dying, not about her past. You've dragged the story by rambling, which is not good. Respecting your opinion and stuff, that was a very nice read to me. Also, didn't you say before about representing the person's past life flashing before their eyes slowly before they die or sorta? I don't see why change opinions about including a certain thing now, that sounds like a excuse to give unnecessary critic.

Also, knowing about her past was good. Even if that childhood whippings and stuff was not canonic (that idk, since i don't really like Michelle as much as the others and i don't get interested to know about her past), it felt like a nice backstory, a nice brief of her life. Sometimes, backstory can keep the reader interested, like me.

If my argument sounds offensive, no offense meant; just stating things, as it is better to be honest about what do you think. And i think this story (more like a one-shot, but meh) is not sloppy, imo.